Starting at 5:00 p.m. and ending at 9:00 p.m., come join us for a night of fun. Please invite your friends and families, and don't forget to bring your pets. There will be free pizza and pop for you as well as free dog, cat, and bird food for your pets. From 5:00 to 5:30 will be meet and greet time, then from 5:30-6:30 there will be an Insightful message, after that food and drinks will be served and you will have plenty of fun to have from there. We will have animal knowledge games for all age groups with toys and prizes for your kids and your pets. There will be demonstration pet homes for your pets to try out and see what they like best, there will also be an abundance of toys for your pets to try and that will all be available to win through the games. This is an event you don't want to miss. So don't forget to invite your friends, and definitely don't forget to bring your pets, for a night of fun at Boddy Animalscapes.
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Okay, I totally LOVE your background. I'm still struggling with the logo. You really need to not arch it and change the font so it's easy to read.
ReplyDelete• Saturday, October 1, 2016 - No 1st and always include the year
• Proofread your post before publishing and get rid of all the extra 'that' words. It's the most overused word in the English language.
• Our event will featuring displays - feature displays
• 5:00 p.m. to 9:00 p.m.
• A speech doesn't sound interesting, how could you twist that?
• Are pets invited?
• Don't use so many !
Overall, good writing, interesting event, and well thought out.
Your main deduction came from missing a graphic and source, which is required for every post.
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